Some people say that in many schools from primary to university, in all levels, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree/disagree?

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Knowledge
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is power, and the quality of education determines the level of success one can achieve. In
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contemporary epoch, it has been reckoned by a few individuals that at various levels of educational institutes, most of the focus is dedicated
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remembering factual information
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of learning practical skills.
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and will discuss the testaments in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, most of the
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have shifted their approach to imparting
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experience to pupils to make them aware of technological advancements. To expound, most of the efforts are put
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giving demonstrations of new concepts so as to make them tech-savvy. As
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scientists and engineers are making developments
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, it has become mandatory for
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to have well-structured laboratories and opt for modern
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of imparting
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, various universities and
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in India have audio-visual rooms, computer laboratories and chemical laboratories to help students stand out from the crowd and to make them confident.
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reason clearly substantiates why institutes focus too much on practical skills. To
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solidify my disagreement,
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at all levels spend enough time on practical
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to give
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understanding of the concept.
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, learners will not only have
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of the mechanisms but
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become curious to understand the logic behind every topic taught to them. To cite an example, those who are given live demonstrations from an early age have a higher I.Q. because they are not taught to learn but to understand
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things better. Universities which put effort
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in a modern way produce more confident and intelligent students.
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, the more the logical
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of learners, the higher the confidence, which has been explained by the aforementioned example. To recapitulate, some people claim that a lot of time is spent on lectures in
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and universities
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I disagree with
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proposition. In my view, these institutes understand the importance of technologically advanced brains and prefer to make them confident and better learners,
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they make decisions wisely.

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coherence
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The essay has a clear opinion stated in the introduction, which is important for task achievement.
coherence
Well-developed points that are supported with examples provide a strong basis for your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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