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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvatages of working and living in a foreign country.

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In the modern
world
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 more people tend to travel to different countries for
a long periods
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 of time, for job or study purposes. There are many undeniable benefits to justify
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 tendency.
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, it does come with its difficulties. In
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i
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 will review both
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
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 conundrum and prove why is it better to pursue
in
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travelling to another
country
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. When people set off
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 mother
country
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, they deprive themselves
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 their safe place where somebody actually cares for them.
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 leads to
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great solitude and mental problems in the foreign
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 they are left with no one by their side to improve
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 situation.
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, native citizens are usually rude to
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foreigners
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 they can even be doubtful and very unwelcoming. Another issue is that native companies usually don`t favour immigrants when it comes
choosing
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to choosing
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 candidates for work.
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,they can pick decent and average
candidate
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 rather than very competent
foreigner
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foreigners
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. These difficulties can make one's experience in another
country
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 very unpleasant.Yet it is still better to try to pursue
into
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travelling to another
country
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 as it has its benefits overpowering them.
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, before going to one's desired
country
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, it is prudent to find some
acquintances
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acquaintances
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 there will be some people you can approach
to
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and ask for possible help. Reaching out to locals and studying their culture before venturing into their
country
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 is crucial as you will appear to them friendly and easy-going,
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 making an integration simpler. Another thing is when you are moving to another
country
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better
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the better
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 economic situation you are
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 a whole lot of financial possibilities , so
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 will improve your quality of life.
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, travelling to other countries can be challenging and
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 even dangerous sometimes, yet I still think it is better to venture into the unknown to make your life interesting and better. You need to remember you can always return to your motherland when there is too much for you to handle , so it is better to try and
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comeback
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 knowing it was too much, rather than not trying at all

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly state the advantages and disadvantages in separate paragraphs to improve clarity and logical flow.
Task Achievement
Use a more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance fluency and readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be careful with spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'i' should be capitalized as 'I,' and 'acquintances' should be spelled as 'acquaintances.'
Task Achievement
The essay introduces the topic clearly and provides a personal opinion at the end, which is a good practice for IELTS essays.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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