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The bar chart depicts the distribution of income groups, namely low (40,000 dollars or less), lower middle (40,00 - 70,000 dollars), middle (70,000 - 120,00 dollars), and high (120,000 dollars or more) in the cities and the regional centers of Australia.

The bar chart depicts the distribution of income groups, namely low (40,000 dollars or less), lower middle (40,00 - 70,000 dollars), middle (70,000 - 120,00 dollars), and high (120,000 dollars or more) in the cities and the regional centers of Australia.
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The bar chart above
define
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defines
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 the
population
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 income between
Cities
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 and Regional
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centers
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centres
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, and
but
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put
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 them
in
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into
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 4 groups, Low ( 40,000 or lower), lower
middle
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 (40,000 to 70,000),
middle
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 (70,000-120,000),
high
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and high
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 (120,000 or higher). In
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Cities
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Cities,
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 the
Middle
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class
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 is exactly 35%
from
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of
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 the
population
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, and the second is Lower
middle
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 by 30%.
Moreover
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, the
Low
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Lower
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class
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is
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has
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 the lowest percentage in
Cities
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near
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 13%.
Nevertheless
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,
approcmatily
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approximately
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approcmatily
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approximately
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 in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary. 35% of Regional
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centers
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centres
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is
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are
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 Lower
middle
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 people, below it
come
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comes
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Middle
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 with more than 25% of
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population
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the population
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.
The wealthy
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Wealthy
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 people
is
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are
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near
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nearly
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 15% of Regional
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centers
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centres
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 and they are
minority
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a minority
the minority
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.
To sum up
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, the
Middle
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 and lower
Middle
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is
Verb problem
class are
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 the major
population
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 in both
Cities
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 and Regional
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centers
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centres
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, and the minority is Low and High
class
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, but in
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Cities
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Cities,
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 The
Middle
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 is the highest and the
Low
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Lower
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class
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is
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has
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 the
Lowest
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lowest
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 percentage. Regional
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centers
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centres
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is
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are
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 slightly
difference
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different
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 but
over
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overall
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all
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all,
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 they are near each other.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, centers, middle, class with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the ninth paragraph.
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