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Band 4

In many countries it is common for families to own and run their business. Some people think it is the best way to run a business while other consider this a potential source of problems. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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The issue of
common
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 for business has become a prominent point of contention in modern discourse.
While
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 one group advocates that common for families to own, another group argues in
favor
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 of
other
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others
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consider
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this
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 a potential source of problems as a
prederable
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preferable
 solution.
This
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 essay will analyze both perspectives in detail before presenting a reasoned conclusion based on the evidence at hand. Supporters of
usually
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 countries
it
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where it
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 is common for
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families
familes
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families
 to own
run
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apply
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business
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businesses
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 contend that

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introduction
Ensure the introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the main points that will be discussed.
coherence
Improve the logical structure by clearly organizing the arguments for and against in separate paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or illustrations to strengthen key points and enhance clarity.
task achievement
The essay presents an attempt to analyze both sides of the argument, which is a good approach.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commitment
  • understanding
  • trust
  • flexibility
  • decision-making
  • legacy
  • stability
  • conflicts of interest
  • professionalism
  • succession planning
  • nepotism
  • qualified
  • sustainability
  • leverage
  • risks
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