A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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money
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resources
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issue. On the one hand, a category of
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oil
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properties
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of
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between searching for
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and developing new
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for
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modern
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how to
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develop
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and make it more comfortable and take care
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nature. In conclusion, I think those
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spend a
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ways.
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and
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searching for
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as for new
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. I believe it will help
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countries
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we must get
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to use electric cars
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, I think the authorities must devote
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and
money
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on
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to
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developing new
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of power,
such
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as wind and solar.

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coherence & cohesion
Ensure proper grammar and sentence structure to enhance clarity. For instance, phrases like 'money searching for oil' can be rephrased for better understanding.
coherence & cohesion
Avoid repetitive phrases such as 'spend a lot of money' and vary your language for a more engaging essay.
task achievement
When discussing both perspectives, ensure to provide a balanced insight with specific examples to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You clearly presented two opposing views which is crucial for this type of essay.
coherence & cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, which is essential in IELTS essays.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • finite
  • renewable energy sources
  • expenditure
  • compromise
  • sustainable
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructure
  • economic sustainability
  • dependency
  • fluctuating prices
  • stimulate
  • job creation
  • vested interests
  • transition
  • reluctance
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