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Employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress at work. They should only care about the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Employers should not be concerned about the way their
employees
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dress
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work
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. They should only care about the quality of their
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. I disagree with
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 statement and in my essay, I will explain why.
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, sometimes incorrect
employees
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'
dress
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 may cause misunderstanding among customers.
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, in fast food restaurants
work
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 uniforms, are essential an attribute of
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 that helps to easily identify them.
Moreover
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, in premium-level restaurants, waiters' uniforms are one of the main aspects. Uniforms are
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 an important part of the emergency services staff
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 as police, ambulance and firefighters, uniform helps to easily identify them.
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, employee
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 is an integral part of almost any profession,
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, office workers who often have meetings and it is strange if they wear a regular tracksuit.
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, at the business level taxi drivers are required to wear a business suit
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 the company's rules. Flight attendants
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 must wear a special uniform to their airline. In conclusion, employers should not be concerned about the way their
employees
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dress
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 at
work
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. I disagree with
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 statement because
employees
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'
dress
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 is an integral part of almost any job.

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task achievement
Consider expanding on your main points to provide a fuller discussion. For example, you could explore the impact of employee dress on workplace culture or employee morale.
coherence
Try to improve the logical flow between your paragraphs. Using linking phrases can help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your main arguments. This will help readers understand what to expect in your essay.
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You have a clear opinion stated in the introduction, which is a good start.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, particularly in discussing uniforms in specific professions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dress code
  • Professional appearance
  • Corporate culture
  • Freedom of expression
  • Productivity
  • Discrimination
  • Inclusivity
  • Diversity
  • Industry standards
  • Safety regulations
  • Employee morale
  • Job satisfaction
  • Attire
  • Corporate identity
  • Gender identity
  • Cultural sensitivity
  • Workplace norms
  • Employee well-being
  • Business etiquette
  • Professional conduct
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