The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities with European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities with European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart
provide
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provides
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key information about European
adults
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adult's
adults'
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activities in 1985 and 1995. The unit
measured
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is measured
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in percentage.
Overall
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, it's clear from the graph that European people like mostly to
watching
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watch
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TV
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.
In addition
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, in
1985
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the 1985
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graph eating out is come after watching
TV
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, talking with family is the lowest percentage between
this
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group.
Also
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, in 1995 the second activity
is
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was
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playing computer games, and the lowest thing to
di
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do
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in
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this
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that
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year
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is eating
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was eat
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out.
According to
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what is
show
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shown
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, watching
TV
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is the most attractive activity for people
in
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of
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this
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age in both years with
percentage
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a percentage
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32
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of 32
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% in 1985 and 30% in 1995.
Moreover
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eating out in 1985
take
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took
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23% but in 1995
had
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there was
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huge
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a huge
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decline
by
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of
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15% to reach 8%
in
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apply
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this
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year
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.
Nevertheless
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, playing computer games
doesn't
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didn't
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apper
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appear
in 1985 but in 1995
this
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item had 27% and
came
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became
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the second
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most intresting
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intresting
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interesting
activity for adults to do
for
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apply
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this
Linking Words
year
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. In terms of watching
TV
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decrease
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decreased
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slightly by
remain
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remaining
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the highest
persentage
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percentage
in the group.
Also
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playing computer games have
huge
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a huge
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increase
for
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in
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the
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apply
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2nd place, and eating out in
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year
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the year
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1995 shows
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a decrese
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decrese
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decrease
with
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of
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15% and
this
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is the most significant event
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that happen
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happen
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happened
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in
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apply
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this
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year
Use synonyms
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • popularity
  • leisure activities
  • European adults
  • significant rise
  • steady
  • collectively
  • slight increase
  • emerged
  • accounting for
  • percentage of people
  • new leisure activity
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