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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.
The given schemes illustrate how two locations named Fenton and
Meadowside
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 , which are
placed
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 not far from each other , have changed during the period of time from 1962 to nowadays. At first glance, we can clearly observe a significant growth of
the
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both settlements. I would like to admit that the crucial modifications were made from 1962 to 1985. First of all,
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two cities were connected by one road, which helped to make the inhabitants' lives better. In the
Meadowside
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were
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 built a complex, housing estate and superstore. The territory of
Meadowside
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 village was dramatically increased.
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, the area of Fenton city had remained stable. Notable changes we can see beginning from 1985 to nowadays, not only because there were built a considerable amount of new facilities, but
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 ,we can see that two of these places were combined into one city. The hotel, business park and station were allocated on the massive part of the land between villages.
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, now the new railway connects Foton and
Meadowside
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 with the railway station in the middle.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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