The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Smoking
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increased
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is because change in lifestyle has taken mammoth dimensions.
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as a part of their living.
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essay intends to shed light on the driving factors of
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trend and will give feasible solutions to tackle the problem. Begin with, There are so many reasons
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associated with the increasing number of smokers.
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, Stress is the main factor. As we know,
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competitive
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and everybody wants to come
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place.
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, family and work
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responsibilities
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main
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cause of smoking because they can not handle the workload.
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, 30% of
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start smoking under the pressure in the big cities.
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, when
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bad company. Either, mostly youngster start their first smoking when they enter in wrong groups or
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influenced by bad
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. The study shows that
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teenergers
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teenagers
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habit in their early sixteen.
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, many solutions are observed. The contributing solution is government should provide more job opportunities and health education so
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have work and
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have no
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bad habit.
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, If
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increase
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rate
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smoke rate will decrease
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%. What is more, open more
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and support centres for youngster through
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teenegers
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teenagers
give their high
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physical activities. Neither
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do they
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have extra
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, nor
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develop any bad
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addiction
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,
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having
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stress and
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in bad company are
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plausible reasons for smoking. Some ardent steps
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as providing more work opportunities and health education are required to plummet
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situation.

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Language
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling errors and grammatical mistakes. Words like 'smoking' and 'responsibilities' were misspelled, which can detract from clarity.
Content
Strengthen your examples and ideas with more specific details and statistics. Instead of just stating percentages, consider providing context around them.
Structure
Ensure that your paragraphs are well-structured with clear topic sentences and supporting details. This will improve the overall coherence of your essay.
Content
You demonstrate a clear understanding of the causes of smoking and potential solutions, which is essential for the task.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Nicotine
  • Coping mechanism
  • Peer pressure
  • Cultural norms
  • Health risks
  • Misunderstanding
  • Marketing
  • Availability
  • Influence
  • Awareness
  • Dangers
  • Stress relief
  • Smoking cessation
  • Public health campaigns
  • Legislation
  • Support groups
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