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The pie charts below show the size of classes in primary (elementary) schools in four states in Australia in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and lake comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the size of classes in primary (elementary) schools in four states in Australia in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and lake comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the number of
students
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 per class in four different Australian states in 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in all states, most
classes
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 have between 20 and 30
students
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.
Additionally
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, all states have only a small proportion of
classes
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 with more than 30
students
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. As charts show, New South Wales has the highest
percentage
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 of
classes
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 with 26-30
students
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 (32%).But the smallest
percentage
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 of
classes
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 with more than 30
pupils
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 (4%).There was a slightly similar proportion of
classes
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 with 20
students
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 or fewer and 21-25
students
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 at 27% and 37% respectively.In terms of South Australia, the
percentage
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 was the same as New South Wales but it had the greatest number of
classes
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 with 20
pupils
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 or more (35%).
This
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 was followed closely by
classes
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 with 21-25
students
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 at 33%.28% of
classes
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 had 26-30
students
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.Only 4% of
classes
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 had more than 30
pupils
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. When it comes to the Australian Capital Territory, the highest
percentage
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 of
classes
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 had 21–25
students
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 (just over half).38% of
classes
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 had 20
pupils
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 or more.10% of
classes
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 had 26-30
students
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.In terms of Western Australia, the largest number of
classes
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 had 21-25
students
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.There was a little similar proportion of
classes
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 with 20 or fewer and 26-30
students
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 at 26% and 27% respectively.
In addition
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, only 5 per cent of
classes
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 had more than 30
students
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, classes, percentage, pupils with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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