The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.
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The graphs below
depicts
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the three factors namely agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services that
attribute
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contributed
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to
UK
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the UK
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economy
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from 1900 to 2000.
Overall
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, the three elements (Agriculture, Manufacturing and Business and Financial services)
has
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its
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their
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own unique impact or contribution to the
European’s
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European
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economy
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. At the beginning, in 1900, Agriculture was the highest contributor, yet, performance
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all through the twentieth century.
First
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it is estimated at 49% and 50% in 1950,
however
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dramatically drop its influence to 10% in 1975 and at its lowest in 2000 at 5
percent
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. Manufacturing on the
hand
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other hand
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, aided in the
economy
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as the second most
economy
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provider, at 45% in 1900, gradually declining its performance until
year
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the year
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2000 (15%).
In contrast
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, Business and Financial
services
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Services
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started
at
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a
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mediocre impact from 1900 at 5% to 30% in 2000, though not as high as the other
sector
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sectors
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but its performance was very significant to
European’s
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Europe’s
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economic landscape.

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