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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the changes that happened in Porth Harbour from 2000 to
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 day.
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, throughout the years, cafes, shops, and hotels opened, and other areas extended to accommodate a
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 proportion of people. In 2000, on the southern side of the city, there was a public beach, just beside the castle. Another public beach was in
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 part of the city.
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, there were two fishing boats, which were opposite each other.
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 in the north,
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, the other in the south.
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, near each fishing boat, there were two car parks,
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 in the north,
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 the other
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in the south. Nowadays, many changes happened, the castle was transferred to a hotel, and the public beach now is constructed only for hotel visitors. The southern fishing boat changed to a private yacht marina. On the eastern side of the marina, cafes and shops were built. Back in 2000, Porth Harbour had only
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 place specialized for showers,
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, a new
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 was built just beside the private area for yachts.

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Consider providing a more detailed introduction that outlines the key features and changes. This will help guide the reader throughout the summary.
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Make smoother transitions between ideas to improve the flow of your writing. Using linking words and phrases can help connections between descriptions of the past and present.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure the use of precise terms and more varied vocabulary to describe the changes in the harbor, such as 'conversion', 'development', or 'transformation' instead of repeating 'changed' or 'constructed'.
task achievement
You effectively highlighted significant changes in the harbor, such as the transformation of the castle into a hotel and the development of cafes and shops, which is a strong point of your essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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