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# 61. The table below gives information about changes in Overall in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

# 61. The table below gives information about changes in Overall in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
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The table provides key information about the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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 and making comparisons where relevant. Average distance in
miles
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traveled
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travelled
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 per
person
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 per year, by mode of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. The units are measured in
miles
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that cars have the largest average distance in
miles
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traveled
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travelled
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 per
person
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 per year between 1985 and 2000.
In addition
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, in 1985 the taxi was the smallest portion about 13
miles
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 per
person
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,
whereas
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 in 2000 the smallest portion was a bicycle about 41
miles
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 per
person
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According to
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 what is shown, in 1985 the top 4
sectors
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 were trains, local buses, cars, and others.
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, the largest sector was the car with the highest number 3199
miles
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person
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 in 1985. in terms of 2000, the top 4
sectors
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 were the Siam
sectors
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 in 1985, and will
sectors
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 were increasing except the local buses were decreasing from 429 in 1985 to 274 in 2000,
overall
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 all modes increased from 4740 in 1985 to 6475 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, person, sectors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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