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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Angsa 2

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Angsa 2
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This
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 map illustrates the infrastructure changes
happened
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 to the city of Nelson from 2000 to today.
Overall
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, throughout the years, several facilities have been constructed
such
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 as malls, markets,
resturants
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restaurants
, bars, and clubs. In 2000, Nelson had only one market, university, city
center
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centre
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 and train station.
over
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the
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apply
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time, the number of people living in the city has increased.
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, changes need to be
done
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made
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 in order to
accomadate
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accommodate
 a huge number of people.
in addition
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,
people
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demands
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 changed, they need to have
a
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apply
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near by
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nearby
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facitlities
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facilities
, so they do not have to travel long
distences
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distances
for shopping
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to shop
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 or
visiting
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to visit
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a
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apply
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resturants
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restaurant
restaurants
. Nowadays,
in
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on
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 the left side of the university,
new
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the new
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 shopping mall was built.
whereas
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in
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on
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 the right side,
newly
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a new
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 residential hall was constructed.
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, the old market was transformed
to
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into
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new
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a new
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 shop.
in
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On
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 the opposite side of the new shop,
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a conveted
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conveted
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converted
 market was developed.
Resturants
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Restaurants
, bars and clubs opened beside the port.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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