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The table illustrates the alteration in demographic numbers of six large cities in 2017 and 2018

The table illustrates the alteration in demographic numbers of six large cities in 2017 and 2018
The given table gives data on the changes in demographic numbers of six large cities in 2017 and 2018. As the table shows the amount of the demographic numbers of six large cities increased moderately. It can be seen from the table that the demographic number of Delhi has gone up significantly, it was the highest change in all cities over time from 2017 to 2018. The demographic number of Delhi occupied the highest rate of 28 million in 2018. In the remaining five
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, the amount of the demographic increased slower than in Delhi and equal to 0.5 million after 1 year from 2017 to 2018. The demographic number of Laho shows the lowest ratio in 2018.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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