The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

The chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of
Japanese’s
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Japanese
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ages begin in 1960 by 3 separated categories: 0-14, 25-64 and 65+,
also
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the prediction by 2040.
Overall
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, the data emphasizes a remarkable demographic shift,
combine
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with a
declining
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decline
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in the young
one
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apply
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and mature,
whereas
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the elderly experienced
a
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continuous growth.
Initially
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, in 1960, it can be effortlessly
to
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apply
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inferred from the chart that the figure for working-age people stands at 64% and
continue
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continues
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to fluctuate for the next 40 years.
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, it
is
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seemed to peak at 70% in 1970. Familiarly, the proportion of pupils was
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in the downward stage
due to
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it was starkly 30% in 1960
then
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surge
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to 20% in the 2000s. After the next 30 years, the percentage of matures will stop shrinking at just under 60% and
expected
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to start a grow-era.
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, the account for
elderly
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the elderly
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was started at the bottom of the graph, which is 4%. Despite its inconsiderable start, the proportion kept rocketing from year to year. Especially, in
these
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years: 1990, 2010,
2040
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and 2040
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, which
stands
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for 11%, 25% and 37% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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