The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the major motive for immigration and emigration in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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in 2007.
Overall
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,
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job
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account
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accounts
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to
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for
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the highest
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for both immigration and leaving,
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formal
study
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and
people
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with no reason stated were the least
reasons
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for emigration and moving to the country respectively.
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, The majority of foreigners who are immigrating to the United
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kingdom
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are
due to
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definite
job
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(30%) and 26% formal
study
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.
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accompanying someone, looking for
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job
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a job
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, other unspecified
reasons
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and
people
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with no reason stated, each making up 15% and less. In terms of
people
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departing the United
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kingdom
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,
similarly
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to
people
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entering, about 29% state their motive as
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job
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, which is closely followed by 22% of individuals searching for employment overseas.
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,
people
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with no reason stated, accompany or join a relative, formal
study
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and other
reasons
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account for less than 20% each, with
formal
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the formal
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study
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being at the bottom with only 4% of
population
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the population
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.
Howevever
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However
,
while
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definite
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a definite
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job
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sum
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sums
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up the main motivation
of
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for
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immigration and moving
oversea
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overseas
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from the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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,
this
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percentage varies in terms of the least
reasons
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why
people
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relocate.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom, job, reasons, study, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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