Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. examine my answer Please write in English language.

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people
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think that governments should look for different
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plants
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on
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there are others
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that there are more
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important
issues and matters to be solved on
earth
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,
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this
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essay both opinions will be discussed and my point of view regarding these views
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the causes of my opinion and some examples.
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some
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think that our planet is no
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able to have humans on it
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different changes in its nature or some changes will happen in the future like climate change
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also
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they may think that the size area of land
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earth
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will not be enough for all
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who
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their numbers are increasing year after year and they reached above 7 billion.
on the other hand
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, there is a different view which says that solving
earth
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's issues and matters is more helpful rather than looking for alternative
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as they can see that some problems can be solved
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, looking for empty lands to have
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on it. in my
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opinion,
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I think both views are
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valid
because there
some
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problems on
earth
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impossible to
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solve
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them
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apply
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such
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as climate change and the only solution is
looking
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to look
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for
alternative
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an alternative
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place
capabile
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capable
capability
to recieve humans, but
also
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there are subjects on the planet
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who have
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the priority to solve them for the good for
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because they are the ones who facing the consquences if these problems have not been solved. in
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our planet is going in
hazard
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way
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ways
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because of different catastrophics where some of them can be solved
while
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the
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apply
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other we have to face
them
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apply
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or
looking
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for
different
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a different
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place.

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Language
Consider rephrasing the introduction for better clarity and correctness. Ensure subject-verb agreement and use appropriate vocabulary.
Coherence
Make sure to clearly differentiate both views in separate paragraphs for better organization.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples to back up your claims about the issues on Earth and the search for other planets.
Task Achievement
You present both sides of the argument clearly and provide your opinion, which is a good approach to the task.
Coherence
Your attempt to use linking words shows awareness of structure, and it adds to the flow of the essay.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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