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: The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

: The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data provides key information about the top three countries in the world with the most
population
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 .
Overall
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its
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 clear from the graph that
China
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,
India
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 are the highest
population
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country's
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countries
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.
In addition
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,
China
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 and
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India
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population
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 are a little bit close to each other .
Whereas
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USA
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the USA
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population
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 is way lower than them .
According to
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 what is shown ,
China
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 is taking the lead of the most
population
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country
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 with 1.415 billion . In the second place comes
India
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 with 1.354 billion .
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 we
get
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USA
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the USA
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at
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the
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third place with 327 million . In terms of ,
urban
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the urban
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population
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USA
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 has the
most amount
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highest
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 percentage with %83 , And the
country
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 that comes after the US is
China
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 with %58 percentage of
urban
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the urban
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population
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 .
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last
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 one is
India
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 with the lowest amount of percentage
between
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among
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 the three
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country's
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countries
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 ( %32 ) .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, india, usa, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age distribution
  • urbanization
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • healthcare accessibility
  • literacy rate
  • educational attainment
  • demographic trends
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic factors
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