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Some people believe that technology has made life more complicated. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times
technology
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 has been growing rapidly, and most people think life has become hard with advanced
technology
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. I strongly agree because modern
technology
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 has been difficult
to
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 particular age
group
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groups
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.
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, many
applications
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 are complicated to use them.
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 with, technologies have become difficult for the baby boomer generation. since they live in different eras, enhancing new tech requires hard work.
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,
while
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 using some
applications
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 they are struggling because it doesn't have any manual instructions which is the reason they keep asking younger generations for help.
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, some kinds of
technology
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 are so complicated that doesn't work with small kinds of errors.
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, autopilot mode in cars makes it comfortable but it is so scary when there are high chances for malfunction.
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, some
applications
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 do not have user study experience, if
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 step is skipped it is more complicated
to
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 older people to use them.
Therefore
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 application will be hard to operate.
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, Government
applications
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 in some countries are so difficult to understand particularly for the farmers who do not have time to learn those and
seeking
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 help from others, sometimes they are
victim
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victims
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 of scams too.
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, AI has been taking bread and butter from employees and making mankind hard to survive. Another example is Amazon launched robotics in their warehouse for sorting packages where 280 employees were fired from the place.
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, rapid change in
technology
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 makes life more complicated because it is designed for all groups of ages. The senior generation is facing difficulty in it. and many people losing their jobs
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 AI.
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 I would like to say I completely agree that our lives were good in
olden
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the olden
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 days when there was no
advance
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technology
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.

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