People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown from other areas. As a results, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantage of this tend outweigh the disadvantage?

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In recent years, choices of
people
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have changed a lot. Now,
people
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like the taste of other places rather than local
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. I think
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the disadvantages of
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trend outweigh the advantages because
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are neglecting the importance of their own crops and species. Many prefer to eat Italian, Chinese or other regional cuisines.
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Advancements in the
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industry,
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have become bored with
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local
meal
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. They adore a variety of cuisines but are unaware that
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transported from other regions may modified in an undesirable or unhealthy way to achieve its current state.
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, recently thousands of tons of Chinese garlic were delivered by trucks to us.
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,
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tend to buy
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rather than indigenous species. Infect, a study claims that Chinese garlic might have cancer properties. But
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of growing regional crops, they eat a wide variety of
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from other areas.
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, remote or nonlocal
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may be expensive or less cost-effective. Expenses of transportation sometimes are unbelievable.
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, once every year onions arrive internationally in India , particularly after monsoon and they are so much expensive.
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, poor or
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from disadvantaged communities cannot afford it.
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, agricultural land is equal to gold if the crop is successfully grown. Regional
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can adopt innovations and technology in the sowing and harvesting of crops so foreign species can be sown in our areas. Farmers can make a profit by selling and customers take advantage by buying foods at reasonable
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. In conclusion,
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the public
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may have a variety of
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from other regions but our land of gold can be lost and
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lead to a high cost of
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which
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in other places.
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, the disadvantages of
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trend definitely outweigh the advantages.

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