The graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incidence of whooping cough, a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the impact of vaccinations on the incidence of whooping cough, a childhood illness, between 1940 and 1990 in Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the influence of vaccinations on the frequency of a childhood illness named whooping cough, from 1940 to 1990.
It is clear that
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during the first 15
years
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, the number of the disease incidence was significantly
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higher
campared
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compared
to the following
years
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.
Overall
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, with the increase in vaccinations, the
cases
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of whooping cough became a very rare phenomenon. Focusing first on the period when the vaccine was
abcent
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absent
, in 1940, the number of ill children was nearly 60,000,
while
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over two
years
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,
this
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figure skyrocketed to the level of 170,000
cases
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.
However
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, by 1945, we can see a significant decrease in
this
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proportion to its initial level, with its following increase
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160,000 to 170,000 by 1955. As for the period when the vaccination started, in 1955, there were
approximatly
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approximately
90,000
cases
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reported,
while
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between 1965 and 1970, when over 80% of children were vaccinated, the level of illness fluctuated from 0 to 20,000
cases
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, with its following rise throughout the next 10
years
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by roughly 40,000 incidents, when only 30% of children received a dose of a vaccine.
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Regarding
the remaining
years
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,
while
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the vaccine was taken by almost over 90% of
child
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the child
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population, the
desease
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disease
disappeared.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, cases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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