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The process diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Umar

The process diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather goods. Umar
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The
process
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 diagram illustrates the
step
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steps
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 involved in the procedure of creating leather goods.
Overall
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, it is
11-stages
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an 11-stages
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,man-made,linear
process
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. It begins with drying .Washing and sorting
being
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are
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 added during the
process
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 and
finally
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 in results
being
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are
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 in goods. First of all, the animal skin is dried by putting up and completely drying them. After
that
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 they are packaged on a truck which
transported
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 them to the factory. Following that , it is washed in a special box
disposing
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 dirtiness with
a
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water and Lime.
Then
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,
it s
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it's
 prepared
to
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the
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apply
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flattening, first soaking by Lime, separately in order to
after
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turn into a liquid state.After the soaking begin to
flattening
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flatten
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 in
a special equipment
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special equipment
a piece of special equipment
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 which
create
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creates
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in
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a liquid form. At step 7, after flattening it
s
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is
also
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soaking
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soaked
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 in turn with
a
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apply
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water and vegetable matter is added already with
a
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more usage of water, volume,sizes and density called by
tannin
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the tannin
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process
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.After that, it’s spread in a special place and
polishing
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polished
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 by equipment
devise
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device
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 in each square of skin and turned into dense consistency and when it’s fully done,
subsequently
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 the special truck shipped it to
the
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another factory ,
last
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 but not least to produce
a products
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products
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 that they can be offered to the public!creating items.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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