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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featues, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featues, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart displays the number of
grams
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 per person per week of consumption of
fish
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 and some various sorts in a European nation from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, except for
fish
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, which witnessed a slight decrease,
while
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 there was a dramatic decline in the consumption of beef and lamb,
the
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chicken increased sharply to become the most popular food by the end of the given period.
In contrast
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, the figures
of
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for
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fish
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 decreased slightly. In 1979, the majority of people preferred eating beef more than other meats at almost 210
grams
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.
This
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 figure saw a gradual fluctuation for around a decade before rising dramatically in 2004 at 100
grams
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. The lamb numbers followed a similar pattern, starting at 150
grams
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 and falling rapidly to around 60
grams
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 by the end of the period.
On the other hand
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, chicken, which stood at about 145
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, showed
a
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significant growth to reach a peak at 250
grams
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 in 2004. Eating
fish
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 continued to be the least popular compared to other categories.
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, there was a steep variance in eating
fish
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over time
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 to end at 5000
grams
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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