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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How patients evaluated health centre services

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. How patients evaluated health centre services
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The data provides
the
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information about evaluations by the medical takers based on the five elements of services at
three
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 health institutions.
Overall
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, the Doctors’ service obtained higher scores than the average at
the
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all
three
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centers
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whereas
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 the pharmacy section got relatively lower points at
the
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all places. The Doctors’ service obtained more than eight points in the
three
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 institutions and the highest score
is
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 8.7 in Peveril
Center
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. At
Longston
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Langston
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center
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, booking appointments only attained 5.2, which is about
two-third
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 of the Marchbank
Center
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 and about
a
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half of the Peveril
Center
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, respectively. The pharmacy section got roughly from 5 to 6 points at all the places, which shows that the aspect gained lower than the figure of the
overall
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 average. Regarding to care of children, the
three
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center
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 gave moderate scores ranging from 6.3 to 7.5. It can be clearly seen that Peveril felt satisfied the most in response
of
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 concerns, with 9.6 the highest number of all
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 the figures at the other two
centers
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 are much lower than that, at 4.3 for Longston and 6.5 for Marchbank respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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