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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the distribution of
people
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 born in and outside
Australia
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 who lived in
cities
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,
towns
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, and rural
areas
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 in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
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, the majority of
people
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,
both
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 born in and outside
Australia
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, lived in
cities
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 in
both
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 years.
However
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, rural
areas
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 saw a significant decline, especially among
people
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 born outside
Australia
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. In 1995, around 50% of
people
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 born in
Australia
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 lived in
cities
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,
while
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 about 60% of those born outside
Australia
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 lived in urban
areas
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.
Towns
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 were less populated, with approximately 20% of Australian-born
people
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 and 10% of foreign-born residents living there. Rural
areas
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 had a noticeable number of
people
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, around 30% of those born in
Australia
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 and 40% of those born overseas. By 2010, the percentage of
people
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 living in
cities
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 increased for
both
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 groups—reaching around 65% for Australian-born and 80% for those born overseas.
In contrast
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,
both
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towns
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 and rural
areas
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 experienced a decline. Less than 20% of
people
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 lived in
towns
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, and rural
areas
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 became the least populated, with fewer than 10% of foreign-born and about 15% of Australian-born residents.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities, towns, areas, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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