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Band 4.5

Some people claim that human activities cause global warming, while others believe it is a natural phenomenon. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Global warming is a highly debated issue, with some attributing it to human activities,
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 others argue that it is a natural phenomenon.
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many scientists believe that human activities are the primary driver of global warming.
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 the burning of fossil fuels, deforestation, and industrial processes release large amounts of greenhouse gases, carbon dioxide (CO₂) and methane, into the atmosphere. These gases trap heat, leading to the greenhouse effect and rising global temperatures.
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, rapid urbanization and agriculture contribute to environmental degradation.
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, large-scale farming releases methane from livestock and nitrous oxide from fertilizers, exacerbating
climate
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 change.
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some believe that
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 change is part of Earth’s natural cycle. Throughout history, the planet has experienced warming and cooling periods
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 factors
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 as solar radiation, volcanic eruptions, and oceanic currents.
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 fluctuations have been recorded in the past,
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 as the Medieval Warm Period (900-1300 AD) and the Little Ice Age (1300-1850 AD), which occurred before industrialization.
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 natural factors may contribute to
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 change to some extent, overwhelming scientific evidence suggests that human activities significantly accelerate global warming, making it clear that human influence is a major factor. Governments, businesses, and individuals must work together to implement effective solutions and protect the planet for future generations.

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structural
Consider providing a clearer outline of the essay structure in the introduction to guide the reader, such as stating explicitly that you will discuss both views before sharing your opinion.
cohesion
Use smoother transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of the essay. For example, you can start the second body paragraph with a phrase like, 'On the other hand,' to clearly distinguish the differing viewpoint.
task achievement
In the final opinion paragraph, it would be beneficial to rephrase the conclusion to summarize the key points discussed rather than simply stating your stance on human influence. This would strengthen the overall impact of your conclusion.
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The use of relevant examples, such as the impact of agriculture on methane emissions, provides clarity and strengthens your arguments.
task achievement
Your opinion is well-articulated and indicates a clear understanding of the topic, effectively addressing the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • human activities
  • natural phenomenon
  • greenhouse gases
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • industrial processes
  • agriculture
  • volcanic eruptions
  • solar radiation
  • climate cycles
  • contribute to
  • main cause
  • exact contributions
  • significant role
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