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The graph below gives information about U.S government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about U.S government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates information
how
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on how
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 much
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
government
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 spent annually on five types
on
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of
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research
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 from 1980 to 2008. Overview,
while
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 the
space
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 and other
research
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 groups witnessed a significant fluctuations trend, a slow growth trend was observed in the energy
research
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 group. Notably, spending on medical
research
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 experienced grew strongly during the observation period. In 1980, with an
investment
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 of about 9
billion
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 USD, the US
Government
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's
spended
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spending
 on health was the largest, more than ⅓ more than the 2
space
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research
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 and twice as much as other types of
research
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. After four
years
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,
this
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 figure showed a slight decline to 6
billion
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 in 1984. Over the past 24
years
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, the amount of US
government
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investment
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 in healthcare has seen a dramatic increase, reaching $21
billion
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at the end
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 of the observation period…… and remain Followed by
space
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research
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 and
others
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other
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research
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, with around 7
billion
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 in 1980. In 1984, there was a slight decline to $5
billion
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, and from
then
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 until 1988, the
investment
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 in these two types of
research
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 remained stable at
this
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 level. After 20
years
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,
this
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 figure showed strong fluctuations until the end of the cycle, when
space
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research
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 and other
research
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 reached $9
billion
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 and $7
billion
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, respectively.
In contrast
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, spending on energy was at its lowest in 1980 at around $3
billion
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, half the amount spent on health care. It has since remained stable at
this
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 level for 12
years
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. After four
years
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,
government
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 spending on
this
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research
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 grew sharply, reaching about $5
billion
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 in 1996, and
then
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 showed steady growth until the end of the cycle.
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, the science general study does not look at the amount of US
government
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investment
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 over the entire cycle.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words government, research, space, investment, billion, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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