In many countries legal driving age is 18 years old. Some people believe it is the right age to learn how to drive a car, whereas others say that the minimum age should be 25. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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All of the
countries
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in the world have the minimum age for driving a car. The
quesion
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question
is, Legal driving should be 18 or 25
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old. In my opinion, I believe legal driving should be 18
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old. In
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essay, I am going to discuss both views and give my opinion.
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people
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who are 18
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they
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usually want to be independent,
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, They have enough responsibility to
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a car,
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, they have many duties to do
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as
an
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university.
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, universities
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far from houses,
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, they need to have driving license
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while
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when
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they are 18
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old.
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, they realize any danger which might happen
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they are driving a
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vehicle
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, in my country 18
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old is legal driving because
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who are 18
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old have to do duties or go to work.
on the other hand
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,
some
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in some
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countries
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which have dangerous
people
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the minimum age is 25.
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are a few
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suffer
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that suffer
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from
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drugs
or smoking
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weed
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,
therefore
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, their government
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driving legal
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25 or might higher than 25,
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, they face 180 crimes
everyday
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.
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, in
colombia
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driving legal is 25 because the
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there do not have enough responsibility until
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they 25
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,
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government
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the government
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' colombia
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of Colombia
decided
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legal
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25. In conclusion, I would argue that 18
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old is enough to
driving
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a vehicle.
Also
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, They are responsible
to
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for
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driving a car.
some
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countries
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have an issue with their community so the legal driving there is 25
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old.

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Task Achievement
The introduction is clear, but it could be improved by rephrasing the thesis statement to make it more engaging. Try to include a brief overview of the arguments that you will discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Some sentences are too long and could be broken into shorter sentences for better clarity. Aim to have a good mix of sentence lengths.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to proofread for grammar and spelling errors (e.g., 'drogs' should be 'drugs'). Proper spelling and punctuation improve the overall quality of your essay.
Task Achievement
Try to provide more diverse examples for both views. For instance, discuss factors that contribute to supporting 25 as the legal age apart from crime rates alone.
Task Achievement
You present a clear opinion that is maintained throughout the essay, showcasing your stance effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical; you effectively separate each viewpoint in different paragraphs.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Driving age
  • Legal driving age
  • Minimum age
  • Independence
  • Personal growth
  • Responsibility
  • Transition
  • Reaction times
  • Adaptability
  • Maturity
  • Risk understanding
  • Financial stability
  • Road accidents
  • Risky behaviors
  • Young drivers
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