You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter -say who you are -give details about the accident -suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to express my concern regarding the EXO supermarket's safety policies. My name is Sim, I am living in Mississauga. I am new in
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city as I have been moved from Oakville. I am from India and when I used to live in Okaville it was very hard to find
the
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Indian groceries. Since
,
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I moved here some of my friends highly recommended
to visit
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EXO
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the EXO
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supremarket
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where I can get every type of item and food
products
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. So,
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Sunday I decided to visit
shop
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the shop
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to get some fruits and vegetables.
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, I
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appreciate the customer service all the employees were very helpful because there
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some things I couldn't find and they helped very calmly. Unfortunately,
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I was looking for some kind of
cereals
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someone was picking hot chocolate boxes from the upperselves and no one was holding the table where he was standing. Suddenly, he lost balance and fell on my side
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as
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all the products from
rack
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the rack
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fell on me and that person. Quickly, I helped me to move out from the heavy products and
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he noticed that I
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rash
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on my arm. After that, some employees took first aid for us and helped to get
bandge
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banged
bandage
on injury. Fortunately, that was not
big
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trouble. But, I want you to understand the safety rules and make some arrangements so that
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will not happen in future. Yours faithfully, Sim

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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a brief introduction about the purpose of the letter at the beginning to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your points more clearly by using paragraphs effectively for each aspect: introduction, details of the accident, and suggestions.
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Make sure to proofread for minor issues, such as spelling mistakes (e.g., 'supremarket' should be 'supermarket' and 'I have been moved' should be 'I have moved').
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While your tone is generally suitable, offer specific suggestions more positively, possibly framing them as collaborative improvements.
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The letter effectively communicates your experience and concern about safety in the supermarket.
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You demonstrated a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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