You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter -say who you are -give details about the accident -suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to express my concern regarding the EXO supermarket's safety policies.
My name is Sim, I am living in Mississauga. I am new in Linking Words
this
city as I have been moved from Oakville. I am from India and when I used to live in Okaville it was very hard to find Linking Words
the
Indian groceries. SinceCorrect article usage
apply
,
I moved here some of my friends highly recommended Remove the comma
apply
to visit
Change the verb form
visiting
EXO
Correct article usage
the EXO
supremarket
where I can get every type of item and food Change the capitalization
Supremarket
products
. So, Fix the agreement mistake
product
last
Sunday I decided to visit Linking Words
shop
to get some fruits and vegetables. Add an article
the shop
a shop
Firstly
, I Linking Words
will
appreciate the customer service all the employees were very helpful because there Verb problem
apply
are
some things I couldn't find and they helped very calmly. Unfortunately, Wrong verb form
were
while
I was looking for some kind of Linking Words
cereals
someone was picking hot chocolate boxes from the upperselves and no one was holding the table where he was standing. Suddenly, he lost balance and fell on my side Fix the agreement mistake
cereal
as well
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as
all the products from Correct word choice
and
rack
fell on me and that person. Quickly, I helped me to move out from the heavy products and Correct article usage
the rack
then
he noticed that I Linking Words
got
Verb problem
had
rash
on my arm. After that, some employees took first aid for us and helped to get Correct article usage
a rash
bandge
on injury. Fortunately, that was not Correct your spelling
banged
bandage
big
trouble. But, I want you to understand the safety rules and make some arrangements so that Add an article
a big
this
will not happen in future.
Yours faithfully,
SimLinking Words
kaursaijbir
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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a brief introduction about the purpose of the letter at the beginning to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your points more clearly by using paragraphs effectively for each aspect: introduction, details of the accident, and suggestions.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for minor issues, such as spelling mistakes (e.g., 'supremarket' should be 'supermarket' and 'I have been moved' should be 'I have moved').
task achievement
While your tone is generally suitable, offer specific suggestions more positively, possibly framing them as collaborative improvements.
task achievement
The letter effectively communicates your experience and concern about safety in the supermarket.
task achievement
You demonstrated a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.