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Band 3

Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art which helps to develop quality in people’s life. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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 the opponents say that there are other places from where peace of life can be found. I totally agree with
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 statement, as all individuals have unique talents and not all persons find their occupation in art.
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 with, if a leadership spends money on science or technology it will create more employment
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 of investment in the required sectors so that it can have their own doctors or
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 if they
priotize
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prioritise
 their spending
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 need.
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, when developers are born in these particular areas they tend to cope
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with the present situations and find solutions to fight with them.
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 of any country is going smoothly because
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 of infrastructure is provided by governments they automatically lead happy lives, as folks are happy
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 their skills utilised at the right place. Some persons are born talented in calculations or theories, if their skills are encouraged by leadership they achieve more. In conclusion, investing should be done after looking at the needs and divided
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 of
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penny
 should be
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exaggerated
 to each required department.

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You have presented a clear opinion throughout the essay, indicating your agreement with the statement.
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Your essay addresses the topic of government spending effectively, showing awareness of the issue.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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