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There are many different types of music in the world today.

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There are many types of
music
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 in the world
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 historians factors of
music
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 style formation and development
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 climate, cultural aspects, purpose of
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 and cultural maturity level.
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, the African low
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 countries more like RAP and wild tribes
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, and on the other side, countries with high levels of
culture
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 reach international collaboration like classic
music
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, rock and jazz, and other modern styles and substyles. Why do we need
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? From my point of view, not all of us need
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. Some need
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 for mood harmonization, some for health,
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and some
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 need
music
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 as a doping for sports activities:
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 harmonization between heart rhythm and song rhythm. Someone needs absolute silence for job concentration, for having a rest from people collaborations, for health improvement after the war, air warnings and so on Is the traditional
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 of a country more important than the International
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that is
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 heard everywhere nowadays? I guess the traditional domestic
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 of a country is more important for local
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 saving, and improving. But each
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 needs to develop
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 population migrations, international collaborations, cultural changes and social network trends. As an additional argument, I guess that the traditional
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 of a country is absolutely important as a part of the domestic population`s defence from hybrid war, where
music
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 it’s a part of the propagandistic tool, which the enemy uses for thinking changing before occupations, for domestic populations loyalty. In
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 situation, only traditional
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 used as a part of internal patriotism tool can help to union population in the fight against external and internal enemies

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Make the introduction clearer and more engaging by providing a brief overview of the types of music you will discuss.
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Ensure each paragraph is well-structured, starting with a clear topic sentence and developing that idea logically with supporting details.
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Provide more specific examples of music genres or artists to illustrate your points more effectively.
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Your essay addresses interesting concepts about the importance of music in different cultures and contexts.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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