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Band 4.5

Plastic bags, plastic bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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scientific
researches
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 and journals, many scientists have discovered that the usage of
plastic
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products
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are
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 harmful
for
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 the environment. Earth activists have started their campaign widely since a long time ago, following the massive
plastic
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use
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 in
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every day
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 life.
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 finding has led the urgency
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stakeholders
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 to take a stance towards the prevention of the manufacture of
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-based
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. The fact that
plastic
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 waste is non-biodegradable
create
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 some threat as the bad effect of
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plastic
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 the environment. First and foremost, the non-biodegradable nature of
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make
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 it vulnerable for both aquatic and terrestrial creatures.
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, animals and plants become the most affected side to the bad of
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 waste. By way
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 example, numerous fishes and turtles eat
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 and slowly dying because of it.
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 should be a huge
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 for the
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 and civilians to maintain our
earth
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 stability. The massive
use
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 of
plastic
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products
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 became
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 indication of
civilization
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 setback as we are unable to save
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nature and its inhabitants. The
existance
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existence
 of
firm
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 legal constitution must be enforced by the
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 and be obeyed by the civilians,
in particular
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 the
plastic
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producer
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producers
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 and
user
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users
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. The
government
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 must ensure that the policy regarding the
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use
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 limitation is applicable and assertive.
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 the other hand, the market
also
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 urged
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 find
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 alternative
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plastic
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product
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products
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that is
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 more eco-friendly.
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, we can
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 fabric or paper material for the packaging and stainless steel or glass for the bottle and straw.
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,
non-degradable
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 nature of
plastic
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products
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make
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it
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them
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 harmful
for
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 the environment. It becomes the responsibility
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 the
government
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 and civilians to make a related firm policy and find an alternative
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a
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solution
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this
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 problem.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider revising for clarity; some sentences could be simplified to enhance understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repetition to make the writing more engaging.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports the main idea and is logically connected to the points made in other paragraphs.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points; this helps enhance the overall argument.
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Ensure all your claims are well-supported with explanations; this will make your ideas clearer and more compelling.
task achievement
The essay addresses the issue of plastic waste and its environmental impact, showing a clear understanding of the topic.
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There is a clear recognition of responsibilities that both governments and individuals have in addressing the issue, which reflects good critical thinking.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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