**Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television.** **To what extent do you agree or disagree?**

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Some live activities
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for
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example, celebrations or
tournements
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tournaments
can
be watch
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be watched
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at
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in
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the real
atmospher
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atmosphere
.
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, these things would
watch
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be watched
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in
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at
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the
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apply
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home or
far-away
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far away
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with
television
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. Somebody's idea is
watch
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that watching
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at the same place is
best
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the best
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option, if
compare
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compared
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to
watch
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watching
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far
, I
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away, I
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am completely disagree
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completely disagree
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to
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with
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first
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the first
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idea. In my opınıon,
confort
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comfort
is the most important
criteria
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criterion
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. First and foremost, ı
think
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thinks
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home can be
really
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a really
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suit
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suitable
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place
for
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to
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relax and be chill and
screen
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the screen
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has these terms. When ı come home and ı sit
to
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in
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my
favorite
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favourite
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chair, watch some
ollumpics
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Olympics
and
athletes
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athletes'
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performances. It is so attractive activity for me cause of
television
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. Not only enjoyable ,but
also
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it is very
confortable
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comfortable
.
However
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, if ı imagen
to watch
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watching
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it live, ı should face some
issue
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issues
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.
Initally
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Initially
, ı can't sit and ı must stand for hours.
To sum up
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,
television
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has really good benefits
than
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for
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live
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life
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.
Secondly
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, another advantage of
television
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is watching later and pausing the videos. I think
best
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the best
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side of the screen is
this
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. Sınce, ıf ı miss some part of
show
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a show
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ı can watch agaın and ı can record it easily.
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while
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watch
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watching
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a soccer match, ı can prepare some snacks and drinks.
For instance
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, ıf ı need to go somewhere after that, ı can follow the new news, ı
have
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has
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this
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these
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oppurtunities
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opportunities
.
As a result
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,
television
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can record what happens and you can watch it easily. In conclusıon, ı believe
television
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is better than
live
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life
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,so ı prefer it. My
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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are
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is
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confort
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comfort
and recording sides.

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