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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and bar chart illustrate the police budget and
expenditure
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 in a region of Britain over a two-year period, 2017 and 2018. The table presents the sources of income,
while
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 the bar chart displays the percentage of
expenditure
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 by sector.
Overall
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, total income increased over the period, with salaries remaining the largest area of
expenditure
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 in
both
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 years.
To begin
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 with, the primary source of funding for the police budget in
both
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 2017 and 2018 was the national government, contributing £175.5
million
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 and £177.8
million
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, respectively.
This
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 was followed by local taxes, which generated £91.2
million
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 in 2017 and increased to £102.3
million
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 in 2018.
In contrast
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, other sources, including grants, contributed the least amount of revenue, remaining stable at around £38
million
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 in
both
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 years. Regarding
expenditure
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, salaries accounted for the largest share of the budget, making up 75% of total spending in 2017,
although
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this
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 proportion decreased to 69% in 2018. Meanwhile,
expenditure
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 on infrastructure remained unchanged at 17% in
both
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 years.
In contrast
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, spending on technology saw a notable increase, rising from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, both, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • allocation
  • distribution
  • funding sources
  • grants
  • taxation
  • revenue
  • expenses
  • personnel costs
  • operational costs
  • community safety
  • law enforcement
  • financial dependency
  • prioritization
  • trends
  • analysis
  • implications
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