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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

You are looking for a fuu-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement

Dear Sir or Madam I hope
this
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 letter will find you well and in good spirit. I
also
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 expect that everything is going smoothly on your side. I am writing
this
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 letter in order to accept a full-time job. And I saw your job opening in an advertisement. I would like to apply for the position of accountant.
Moreover
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, I have all
kind
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kinds
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 of requirements that you will ask for the career.
First
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off
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of
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 all, I
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
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graduated from the
university
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University
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 of
UK
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the UK
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at
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in
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 the
filology
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philology
biology
 faculty with a gold medal for excellent performance.
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, I have taken some certificates including IELTS and CEFR with high scores
with
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which
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 can help me to organize my job with people from
the
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apply
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other countries. If I speak about my experience and skills, I am very responsible , patient,
hardworking
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and hardworking
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 and I can
deall
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deal
 with people easily.
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 I have operated for 2 years in a company. I hope you
would
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will
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 take into consideration and accept my application as it is highly necessary for me. I look forward to receiving a letter from you soon.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Umurzoqova Z

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coherence
Your introduction is polite but can be made more formal and clear. It's best to state your intention to apply for the job immediately rather than mentioning that you are writing this letter.
positive
You have a polite and respectful tone throughout your letter, which is important in formal communication.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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