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It is often said "when is Rome, do as the Romans do". Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visit? do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language? Aziza

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When in Rome, do as the Romans do. Adapting to the
culture
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 of the country that
people
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visited
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 is an essential process.
In addition
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, in order to learn the
culture
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, knowing the
language
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 is not required. Showing
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respect for the customs of the countries and following them
always
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 necessary. The reason is,
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that tourist
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tourist
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tourists
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 may face
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some misunderstandings that can breed
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people
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 do not accept the rules of the country.
For example
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, in Uzbekistan, it is often appropriate for
young
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the young
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 generation to land their place in public transport for the older generation to show their respect. If some tourists do not demonstrate their respect for the
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 in transport they can receive misunderstanding from the local citizens.
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,
due to
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this
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 reason, to stay back from issues, individuals should follow the local rules of the place
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 they arrived. Without any
language
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 skills, individuals are completely able to look through and learn one country’s
culture
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.
As there
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There
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 are a lot of sources on the internet
such
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 as
wide
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a wide
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 range of sites,
AI
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and AI
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 assistance where everyone can find data about probably any civilization. To give an example,
people
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 can find
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the widely known Chat GPT in order to explore any society’s way of life just by asking simple
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questions
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such
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 as “Can you give me
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information about Korea’s
culture
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?”.
Hence
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,
people
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 do not have to learn a
language
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 to learn about a society’s traditions.
To conclude
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, following traditional values is tremendously important to avoid problems.
Moreover
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, because of the availability of sources humans do not have to learn
language
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 to explore cultures.

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Use linking words and phrases more effectively to create smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas. This can enhance clarity and flow.
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The examples provided are relevant and help in illustrating your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in maintaining coherence.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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