The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared to those who watched sports, in 2000.

The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared to those who watched sports, in 2000.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared to those who watched sports, in 2000.
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The chart illustrates some information about how many
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percent
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of people
who
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enjoyed
in
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various sports and
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the audiences who watched sports in 2000 .
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, it can be seen that the percentage of citizens
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tennis
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and basketball was
highest
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. Another , people who participated
sports
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in sports
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such
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basket
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basketball
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,
tennis
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and golf
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higher than badminton and golf , especially
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horse riding and racing
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lowest . As can be seen from the chart , the number of people who watched
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tennis
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and basketball was higher than the figures
of
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gymnastics , with 60
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percent
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, over
than
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50
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percent
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and 20
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percent
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.
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, the proportion of citizens who participated
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double
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that
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the
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percentage of
tennis
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, at 50
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percent
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and 30
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percent
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respectively .
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golf
nearly
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triple
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the quantity of badminton , at 30
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percent
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and 11
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percent
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respectively .
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,
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horse riding and racing
was
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were
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lowest
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the lowest
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, with considerably less than 5
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percent
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, tennis with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • viewership
  • percentage
  • demographic
  • sports culture
  • societal norms
  • accessibility
  • influence
  • trends
  • implications
  • health benefits
  • community programs
  • initiatives
  • historical data
  • global comparisons
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