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Some cities have vehicle free days when private cars,trucks and motorcycle are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses , taxes and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Number of vehicles increasing day by day in every nation
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 easy access. Several cities are controlling
pollution
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 levels by banning motor vehicles for one day a week.
People
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 motivated to use public transportation
instead
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 of their own private
transport
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. In
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 essay, I will explore both the pros and cons of
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trend
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 and explain that its advantages are more effective than its disadvantages in the following paragraphs. Considering the positives, In the first place, it helps to combat breathing problems. When multitudes
travel
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 by their own cars, motorbikes, and many more on a daily basis, the count of vehicles on the roads more and creates air
pollution
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 which causes breathing issues like autism.
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, if
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 use public
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 it helps to reduce
pollution
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 and the deadly illness.
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, in Delhi, the higher authorities make the rule of odd and even
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 and on even
days
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 individuals have to
travel
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 by their own
transport
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 and on odd
days
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 they have to
travel
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 by buses. It helps to decrease the air
pollution
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 within months.
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this
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trend
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 is better.
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, the usage of public
transport
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 increases, the government gives subsidies to the local
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, they can use it in a good way
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repair
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 the vehicle on time when
people
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 prefer to
travel
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 by
bus
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.
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,
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 individuals public
transport
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 is not safe because the workers can not take care of their buses by doing regular checkups. Whether the engine works properly or not because they think that individuals not travelling in their
bus
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 so, there is no need for the repair. Despite the positives of
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, several negatives are
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 there. First and foremost, it upgrades the crowd on buses. As everyone has to reach work on a proper time, they have to wait in a long queue to catch the
bus
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 on time and they get late for work. To
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explain
,
people
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 who are daily travelling
in
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bus
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the bus
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 are already in the queue and if the
people
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 who
travel
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 few
days
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 can create a crowd and they do not get a seat and they have to wait for another
bus
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.
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, it is not a good way. In conclusion, even though
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 has some disadvantages, the advantages are more.

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Task Response
Your introduction clearly states your intention to explore both sides of the argument, which is good. However, it would benefit from a clearer thesis statement that explicitly states your viewpoint on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs could improve in logical flow. Try using clearer transition words to guide the reader through your points. For instance, using phrases like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In addition' will help connect your ideas better.
Task Response
Some sentences need to be more precise in their claims. For example, mentioning specific health issues associated with pollution could strengthen your argument about health benefits. Additionally, ensure that spelling and grammatical errors do not distract from your points.
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You have identified and discussed both advantages and disadvantages of vehicle-free days, which shows a balanced view and a good understanding of the topic.
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Your examples, such as the odd-even rule in Delhi, are relevant and help illustrate your points, adding depth to your arguments.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes your argument and reiterates the main point that you believe advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle-free days
  • private cars
  • public transportation
  • buses
  • trucks
  • motorcycles
  • metro
  • pollution
  • air quality
  • traffic congestion
  • commuting habits
  • physical activity
  • health benefits
  • economic benefits
  • community interaction
  • public resistance
  • implementation challenges
  • coordination
  • city authorities
  • logistics
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