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The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the
employment
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rates
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 of individuals aged 60 to 64, categorized by gender, in four different countries. In general, there was a significant decrease in
employment
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rates
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 for
both
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 men and women across all four countries over a span of 30 years.
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, regardless of the country, the percentage of employed
males
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 in the 60-64
age
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 group consistently exceeded that of females in
both
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 years. In 1970, 86% of men aged 60-64 in the USA were employed, which was the highest among the four countries and was a slight margin ahead of Indonesia’s male
employment
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 rate by a mere 2%.
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, the
employment
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 rate for women in the same
age
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 group was much higher in the former than in the latter, at 78% and 65% respectively. By 2000, there was a decline of 8% and 10% in
employment
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rates
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 for
males
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 in the USA and Indonesia respectively. Mirroring the same trend, albeit much more pronounced, female
employment
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rates
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 fell to 45% and 50% respectively.
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, Japan ranked fourth in
employment
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 of
this
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age
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 cohort, with 76% for
males
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 compared to 56% for females, but
both
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 figures went down to 63% and 47%, concluding
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 the third position. Belgium had 79% of
males
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 and 63% of females aged 60-64 employed in 1970, higher than Japan’s;
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,
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, 52% of
males
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 at that
age
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 still worked
while
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 a minority of senior women in
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 nation were employed (8%),
both
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 of which were lowest among these nations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rates, both, males, age with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rate
  • percentage
  • aged 60-64
  • employed
  • country
  • comparison
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant changes
  • socio-economic factors
  • gender disparity
  • highest
  • lowest
  • dataset
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