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The bar chart shows the percentage of international students enrolled in British universities in two years, 1990 and 2014.

The bar chart shows the percentage of international students enrolled in British universities in two years, 1990 and 2014.
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The bar chart compares the proportions of
students
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 from overseas registered in ten different universities in the UK in two single years (1990 and 2014).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 an increase in the registration rate of international learners, from 1990 to 2014, can be found in most of the colleges listed in
this
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 figure, except for Liverpool and
Cardiff
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University
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. Meanwhile, the ratio of international
students
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 enrolled in Brighton
University
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 was significantly higher than those in others in either 1990 or 2014.
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, enrolled rates in Huddersfield and
Cardiff
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 accounted for the lowest percentage among these schools. In 1990, the ratio of international
students
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 enrolled in these ten universities ranged from around 1% to about 13%. Over
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this
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 24 years, the majority of them (eight schools) witnessed a slight growth in the overseas
students
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 enrolled rate by close to 1 to roughly 4%, but those in
Cardiff
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University
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 halved.
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, that in Liverpool was unchanged, at 8%. In both two years, the ratio of international
students
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 enrolled in Brighton
University
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 occupied the first place, with 12% and almost 13%, respectively.
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, that in Huddersfield and
Cardiff
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 accounted for the lowest volume, ranging from nearly 1 to approximately 3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, cardiff, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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