Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and development soft skill in more important Discus both views and give your opinion’

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task achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents both views on the topic, outlining what will be discussed in the essay. Also, provide a clear thesis statement.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied linking words and phrases to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs. This will enhance the coherence and logical progression of your essay.
task achievement
Clarify and expand your examples and explanations regarding why education and experience are important. Specific examples can help strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You provide a balanced view of both education and experience, which is important in a discussion essay.
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Your ideas are generally relevant to the topic, demonstrating an understanding of different perspectives regarding job acquisition.

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