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Some people believe that car free days are effective ways to reduce air pollution However, others argue that there are more effectives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In our rapidly changing
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 there are a
lot
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 of cars.Most people think cars make different types of harmful
air
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.In their opinion, international
car-free
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 days are an effective way of reducing
air
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pollution
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. In my opinion, It is a good way to reduce
air
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pollution
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.The solution can be powerful.
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, global
car-free
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 days are more effective for nature.
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  on the one hand the solution
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 has a downside.For  example, if International
car-free
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 Day
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 at the same time everywhere it will cause a
lot
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 of crowds.
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 there are causing a
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 of different types of trouble. Admittedly,
this
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 solution is not enough to reduce
air
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pollution
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.Factories are producing a
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 of harmful
air
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.From
this
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 problem, nature is suffering. In conclusion , it is more evident that international
car-free
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 days play a crucial role in reducing
air
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pollution
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 shaping our perspectives and actions

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task achievement
Provide more detailed explanations and examples to support your points, especially regarding the advantages and disadvantages of car-free days.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by clearly linking your points and ensuring smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
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Make sure to address the counterargument more thoroughly to strengthen your position and provide a balanced discussion.
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The introduction clearly states the topic and your opinion, which provides a solid foundation for the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your perspective on the importance of international car-free days in reducing air pollution.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollution
  • emissions
  • public awareness
  • sustainable transportation
  • alternative modes of transport
  • infrastructure
  • stricter regulations
  • electric vehicles
  • dependence on cars
  • urban areas
  • environmental impact
  • behavioral changes
  • convenience
  • business impact
  • pollution reduction strategies
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