You recently did a short cookery course.The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Writing a letter to the course director at the cookery school.Hn yoour letter . describe what you enjoed about the course . say how much cooking you have done since the course . suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear Sir, I hope you find you well upon receiving my letter. I am writing you a letter because I want to share my

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about the

course

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that I

had

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taken recently. I am one of the

student

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in the cookery

course

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and I

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happy to be

apart

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the

course

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because aside from learning a lot

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cooking techniques I

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met good friends from your staff. Since I finished the

course

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, I almost cook

everyday

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at home. Everything that I had learned I am doing it when I am cooking and it really

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positive feedback from my family. I am

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to suggest

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you could open a

course

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on Italian style cookery in the future because most of my

friend

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friends

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want to take a foreign style of cooking and I love to do it as well. I am hoping to be back again at your school in the future for another cookery

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. Yours faithfully, Rob

robatowandasu1987Sat Mar 29 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance the flow of your writing.

task achievement

Ensure that your grammar is correct, especially subject-verb agreement and article usage.

positive

You provided a clear description of your enjoyment from the course.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

163 words

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