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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts provide data on the police
budget
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 in a specific region in Britain in 2017 and 2018. The table outlines the sources of funding,
while
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 the charts illustrate how the
budget
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 was allocated.
Overall
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, the amount of
money
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 derived from various sources increased in 2018 in comparison with 2017,
as a
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result
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 there was a modest growth in the total
budget
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 too. Obviously, in both years the national government played the biggest role in the formation of the
budget
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. Most of the funds were spent on the salaries of officers and staff,
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 the minimum figure represented technology in both years. To start, there were only small changes in the figures for the national government and other sources as they both increased minimally,  particularly from 175.5
million
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pounds
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 to 177.8
million
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pounds
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 and from 38
million
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pounds
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 to 38.5
million
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pounds
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 respectively.
However
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, funds obtained from local taxes experienced a noticeable upward trend because the indicator went up from 91.2
million
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pounds
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 to 102.3
million
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pounds
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. The majority of the
money
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 was distributed on the salaries of officers and staff,
in other
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words
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 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018.
Although
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 more
money
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were
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was
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 spent on
the
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technology in 2018 rather than in 2017, the figure was still the lowest since it only rose from 8% to 14%.
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, the amount of
money
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 spent on the buildings and transport did not change and was equal to 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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