The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph allows
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understand how much foreign tourists have spent in the UK between 1980 and 2010; meanwhile, through the pie charts, the way reasons for
visit
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have changed from 1980 to 2010 can be examined.
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, since 1980, the trend has been fluctuating, with some peaks in 1995 and 2005, and lows in 1982, 1993 and 2001. In the meantime, the causes for visiting have remained almost the same, with the main reason being for a holiday. In 1980, about 8,000 million pounds were spent by tourists in the UK; afterwards, the rate kept changing, reaching a high in 1995 at 12,000 and
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continued fluctuating until 2010, when it was at 10,500.
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the expenditure suffered a lot of changes in 30 years, the reasons for visiting the UK remained almost the same, with Holidays being the main proportion, 44,1
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percent
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in 1980 and 39,1
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in 2010.
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,
while
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in 1980 the second place was occupied by business, with a percentage of 20,7
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, in 2010, visiting friends or relatives took the second position, with 28,2
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,
in contrast
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to
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22,8
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of the latter.
Lastly
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, other reasons have decreased from 16,6
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to 9,8
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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