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You are not happy about a service you recei A couple of days ago from a company and you have decided to complain about it . Write a letter to the company to complain about the poor service you received from it's employees

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with
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 terrible service I received from your employers when I visited your restaurant on Monday. I am hoping you would provide a number of solutions and improve
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 as I would like that no other customer would experience
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 kind of situation. I went to your restaurant on Monday, 9th May with my husband with the purpose of having a great birthday. I heard about your restaurant from social media and the comments were excellent.
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, when we were there, the service that your waiters provide was totally worse. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is their manner was rude and we waited for about 15
minutesfor
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minutes for
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the awaiter
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awaiter
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waiter
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 that served us, just to order food from the menu. To make matters worse, the atmosphere was extremely noisy. Unfortunately, we asked
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you about
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this
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 problem for your manager, but he did not provide initiative and the background music was loud. I'm disappointed because I could not take pleasure in the meeting that we organized. So,
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 of my birthday, I was annoyed. To resolve the problem, I would appreciate it if you return 30% of
payment
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the payment
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. I regret to have been in your dining room on
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 an important day and I will never be there next time. But you should know how your employees work and provide service
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 it decreases your clients. Yours faithfully, Kendall Jenner

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task achievement
Consider providing specific examples of your experience to strengthen your complaint and make it more compelling.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make your points clearer and more engaging.
task achievement
The letter has a clear purpose and you expressed your dissatisfaction effectively, which is essential for a complaint letter.
coherence and cohesion
You structured your complaint into paragraphs, which helps to organize your ideas and makes it easier for the reader to follow your points.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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