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Band 4.5

Some people think environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. Do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental issues have been a great challenge recently. Some
people
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 think it is a political
responsibility
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, as they have the power and the authority to encourage
people
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 to save the
environment
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. I strongly disagree with
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 statement. In
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 essay, I will explain why I believe that protecting the
environment
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 is an individual
responsibility
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 at home and in the workplace. At home,
people
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 can play a key role in saving the
environment
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 by
stop
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stopping
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 using plastic materials and replacing
it
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them
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 with glass or wooden tools.
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,
instead
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 of using a plastic cutting board in the kitchen, individuals can replace it with a wooden one;
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 will not only help protect the
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 from non-decomposed materials
,
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 but
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 will enhance their health and well-being. Which will reflect on their performance at work.
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, the workers in institutions can support the
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 and spread awareness in the workplace.
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 will motivate employees to share the
responsibility
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 to save their community and
maintan
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maintain
 healthy habits.
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, educating the staff about the importance of drinking in paper cups and not plastic ones can improve
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 feeling of their critical role in their society. I believe environmental awareness starts with individuals as they are the main block in communities. In conclusion, saving the
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 should not be a political concern.
People
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 should collaborate and encourage each other at home and
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 workplace to spread awareness and share the
responsibility
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of
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for
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 the
environment
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure you clearly outline your main arguments in your introduction. This can help guide the reader through your essay more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for consistency in verb tenses and subject-verb agreement to improve clarity.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear position on the topic, which is essential in IELTS writing.
Task Achievement
The examples provided are relevant and illustrate your points well, which adds strength to your argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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