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The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the
percentage
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 of Canadians who donated money to charity in different
age
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groups
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 for the years 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of donors changed over time, with some
age
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groups
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 giving less to charity in 2015 compared to 2000,
while
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 others increased their contributions. In 2000, the 35-49 and 50-64
age
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groups
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of donors, both close to 35%.
However
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, by 2015, donations from the 35-49
age
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group
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 decreased significantly,
while
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 the 50-64
group
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 saw a smaller drop. The
percentage
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 of donors aged 65 and over increased slightly, making them the most generous
group
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 in 2015. Younger
age
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groups
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, particularly 18-24 and 25-34, had lower donation rates in both years. The 18-24
group
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 showed a small increase in 2015, but the 25-34
group
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 experienced a decline. In conclusion, older Canadians donated more in 2015,
while
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 middle-aged
groups
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 showed a decrease in charitable giving.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, groups, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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