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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and gie your own opinion.

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 where they did their training and some do not . I believe that both have different
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 to find out the reason why the local person get sick what
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 of building the local wants,and
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 to them .
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another country
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 have a wider
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knowledge
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 more about different
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 and different
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 peoples ,learn more different skills to help
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 like Africa or other backward countries ,helping
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 and use all their
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knowlage
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knowledge
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skils
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 to help those
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 they want to help. It is a meaningful thing and
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professional
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 and help
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 believe that those
professionals
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work
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 if they wish .
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 time to study ,learning how to build learning how to help
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sick ,so
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 think they should have
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their choice
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choose where to
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work
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another place
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different
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knowledge
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different
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. They can
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knowledge
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 to increase their quality .Different place have their own top skill to learn like Boston
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 a lot to them to increase themself .At
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 sure that whatever those
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professionals
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 are doing some
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benefit
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly present both sides of the argument in a balanced way. Each paragraph should focus on one specific idea.
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Use more precise language and correct spelling errors (e.g., 'benefit,' 'knowledge'). This will improve clarity of your ideas.
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Try to include more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make it more convincing.
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You provide a clear opinion on the topic, indicating that professionals should be free to work wherever they wish. This reflects engagement with the task.
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Your essay presents valid arguments for both perspectives, showing some understanding of the complexity of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • diversity
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